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This is the way you should break my heart.

Firstly, you have to call me over the phone, since we're both too cowardly to see eachother's faces. Call on a weekend, perferably a Friday night so I can cope over the weekend and stay home that night to curl under the covers.

Tell me, "We had great times but-" then pause, and let me say "But what? Are you breaking up with me?" Say this, "No no no, I'm not...well...yes and no. I really like you but-" pause again because you don't know why you're doing this. "But what?" I will persist. "Is there someone else? Is it something I did? What?" Sense that I am growing angry, and imagine my face contorting to hold back tears. Decide I am ugly. Hate me for it. Do not say "It's not you, it's me." because that's cliche and you're original. Do not say it's someone else, because that will send me into a jealous rage, and you wouldn't want that. Do not tell me we're just too different, because I love you and despite my stubbornness, I would change for you. Oh and please, please, do not say we can still be friends, because we both know we will not be friends.

Make something up, better do it quick because I'll hang up in a fit of depression if you don't. Tell me this: "I had lots of fun with you, you're so great. But...I don't think we're right for eachother."
I will come back with a sad, small. "Oh. I see." Feel bad. Grow quite. I will do the same. In a while, I will come back to you, through tears I will say. "Okay. Well, I have to go then. " and you will say, " I really do love you-" and then pause again. "Good bye."

Hang up before I can say good bye. Leave me listening to the dial tone. I'll wait till I hear "If you'd like to make a call..." and then I'll click the phone off. Oh, make sure I'm in my bed too, so I can just roll over, pull the cover over my head and sob. Okay? And if you could do this for me, some how manage to get all your posession from me-descretly before I know you're going to break my heart. Give me my stuff back too, okay?

And then, when you see me later, with a forced smile. Don't say anthing. Don't look at me. Don't even say you're sorry. If we share friends, I'll back away, no need for them to chose, right? Oh, another thing. Don't tell anyone about the great, or, not so great sex we had.

If you break my heart like this, I'll be ready for it. And you won't hurt me so bad, you...don't want to hurt me right? Well, if you do decided to do it this way, I'll be greatful, and not pine over you, and I won't listen to our song on repeat, and I won't leave you messages of how I still love you.

I'll be waiting by the phone on Friday. If you need to, you can just read off of this. Hell, I'm making this easy for you. Okay? Talk to you then.
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Edit: 5.4.08
I think this is the one of the worst things I've ever written. I hate it more each time I read it, so I've stopped. If you consider favoriting it, PLEASE, take a look through my gallery, there is so much more that's actually WORTH reading than this. Though you are entitled to your opinion, and I appreciate any support.

Thanks. <3
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kayla15783 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i find this to be amazing, i wish my ex had said this to me...it would have still hurt like hell but at least he would have made me feel less like nothing and not have lied...
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
To be honest, this work is completely fiction, and I can't even remember what kind of mindset I must have been in to write it. I feel both proud, and sad that so many young women can relate to it. I hope your hurting doesn't last long, and that you find someone who truly appreciates you and helps you grow.
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vivienami Featured By Owner May 22, 2011
happened to me yesterday (: absolutely destroyed my weekend.. ):
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Veo33 Featured By Owner May 22, 2011
:( I'm very sorry to hear that. Things will get better.
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vivienami Featured By Owner May 23, 2011
i hope so (: thank you !
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:iconblackfire-sweetblood:
i wish my ex could have reead this i wish he could have left me like this then maybe i wouldnt feel how i feel right now..... and by the way i think it was awesome
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011
I'm very sorry for your current situation. The only advice I can offer is that it will get better. This piece is very old, and I'm glad you enjoy it. It would be the ideal break up. haha.

I think though, no matter how someone leaves you, you'll still feel empty when they're gone.
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thankz and it would be the ideal break up lol....
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Mizuki-Anya Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
i hate the 'its not you its me' thing cuz you know its yourself, why else would they do it?
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010
It took me a second to understand you comment.

The person saying it usually doesn't feel the same way anymore, so it's them. It's the speaker's mind who has changed, the speaker who doesn't want the relationship. That is why it is them, and not you. You didn't do anything wrong, they just want something different.
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Mizuki-Anya Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Its just annoying cuz sumtimes you just know you could change, in fact you'd change for them anyway... and they say 'we can still be friends' yet it would never be the same, in my case, he said that but is still ignoring me after two frikken months. its just annoying...
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2010
You shouldn't have to change to be with someone. Your personalities should mesh well, so that each person feels respected, loved, and accepted.

I'm sure it's hurtful and frustrating. All you can do is give him the time he needs and hope for the best. People like to think//say things will turn out well in the end.
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Mizuki-Anya Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, really.... it helped talking.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
:] I'm happy I could help even if a little. Be strong, and don't let go of yourself for any one else.
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khiori-ak Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
may i be unoriginal and say i adore this prose? it's wonderful and dark and descritive. i'm speechless.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
:[ I hate this prose. ahhh.

I'm glad you like it, though. Thank you.
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khiori-ak Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
it's true though, i'm sure this would be the best way to break up. i was dumped on New Years at a party...by text message. I'd much prefer this.

you're very welcome :]
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
I'm very sorry.

:heart:
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khiori-ak Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
it's a whatever deal. i really love this piece though.
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ChocolateQuill Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
So many people can relate to this. I did something like this once-wrote a "guilting" note to my (now ex) bf in hopes that i was being overly paranoid and he'd come up to me saying "haha, what are you thinking!? I would NEVER break up with you" (of course in the back of my mind I knew that was total BS). ANYWAYS, your writing piece is pretty good! Ahhhhhmazing.

Now, let's just hope I don't have to use this note in the future any time soon......
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north-star66 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
despite your protesting that there's better things to read in your gallery, i do like it. it drips with emotion and a kind of anguished passion. it's something i might have written on the 12th of august coming up if you hadnt already wrote it hehheh. i like it, and i will go check out your gallery after this is sent.
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nadianatalialive Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
Are you kidding? This is amazing :) keep writing.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
.__. thanks...but this is what it is.
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samanthas625 Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
I really love this. It is something that so many people can relate to.
I think I'm going to go look at more of your work... :)
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Veo33 Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
Thank you, I appreciate you taking your time to browse. Personally, I think just about everything else in my gallery is better than this.
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samanthas625 Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
I suppose I just really enjoyed it because of how perfectly it was worded and how much I can relate to it.
I agree though, you have a lot of really nice work in your gallery. I believe "Waterline" has to be my favorite. <3
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Veo33 Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
;3; Thank youuu~ :heart:
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Broken-In-Love Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2009
Really good!
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2009
Thanks! :]
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confusedlady12 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
ooh, this is so well written. i love the point of view, it's different :D
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
Thank you, but I think this is one of the worst things I've ever written. XD;
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confusedlady12 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2008
welcome! just don't deleteee it. i always get mad at myself for deleting stories i've written once i hate them.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2008
Yeah, it's always good to look back at old stuff. I just don't read it anymore. I wish I would have saved more of my old drawings D;
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ShellyJo Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2008
I actually really like this, but since you said so, I'll have a look through your other stuff too :)
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hatorikunlver Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
have you ever noticed that some of the pieces you hate the most are the ones people liek the most???
sorry have to fave this!

but i know how you feel
my best friends stole what i consider to be the worst poem i ever wrote and put it in the school's literary magazine
which was pretty sneaking and difficult since i was the editor of the thing

sorry but just think of it this way
it makes over people feel something
which is a sign of good writing
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
Yeah, I've noticed. Haha. It's just...there are other things in my gallery that mean so much more, and i feel are much better written than this. At this point, I'm just like "How can anyone like this?"

But I appreciate the support, and I guess some side of me is happy to know that something written two years ago is still worth some people's time.
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hatorikunlver Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2008
good!
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musicllv Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2008
hmm. its interesting =]
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2008
Thanks.
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musicllv Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2008
yur welcome =]
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foils Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2008
Sounds perfect. If only we could all be so lucky as to have someone break up with us on our own terms.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2008
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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BlondeChloe16 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
I wish my ex boyfriend had seen this before he dumped me..because then i woudlnt have felt like rubbish for the nxt few weeks. He used the normal cliche of: we can still be friends, well to tell you we aint! oh and he's going out with one of my friends, how nice of him =[ anyway i think this is good and should be posted to everyone, so there kind when their dumping someone.
Chloe_Ox
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
:( I'm sorry you're in such a situation. That really sucks.

But i think you're wrong about this being posted everywhere. I honestly feel this is one of the worst things in my gallery. *shrugs* Thank you much anyways. :)
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BlondeChloe16 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2008
Awww..! well i have a look at all your other work.
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bleeding-revenge Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
omg....n ive been telling him to break my heart n kill me all this time...i should just send him this.
maybe he'll get it through his head that im not good enough for him n he should jus hurt me n kiss my pain...wow.
this is great.
rock on XD
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2008
:( I'm sure you're good enough for him <3
thanks for reading. <3
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TheW4lker Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
very true.
nice write, this kind of stuff sucks though.
I know what you went through.
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Veo33 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
Thanks. It never happened to me though, i just wrote about it. haha. ^^;; I'm sorry you know how it feels though.
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mandaislebomb Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2008
:+fav:


loved it ^-^
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